Koisuru Otome English Cover: the song for ××

hi everyone! well masterjz suggested I put something in the creativity zone, and I thought well why not? soooo I decided to put my English cover of Koisuru Otome (love that song). the title is "the song for ××" and it's about someone I loved very much (and still do) ...sooooo, enjoy!

I recorded this a while ago so it's kinda crappy quality. comments, good or bad are entirely appreciated!

here you go: the song for ×× - KANON

by the way there are the lyrics:

05. the song for ××
from Ikimonogakari - Koisuru Otome (2005)

I’ll write another letter for you not to read
I’ll send it back to myself when I fix the stamp
Addressed to you, written by me, but still for me
Should I let anyone else’s eyes touch the page?

The answer’s hidden in the words I wrote to you;
“There’s something I can’t say in person, so I choose.
“I hope this letter reaches you all right in time…”
But I’m too cowardly to send it, so it’s mine

Who can say what I’m feeling? Not me, not a stupid song I wrote
About how much I need you and how I love you so
It’s pointless to wonder, ‘cause you’ll never see or hear it
What’s the problem with me damn it? I’m so afraid

CHORUS
So let’s go slow yeah we’re going slow, for you to have me, I’d do it
For your smile, yeah and for your laugh, I’d do anything at all
‘Cause I love you, everything about you just makes me realize
You aren’t perfect I know that and you’re all the world to me

It’s only now I’m finishing my letter to you
It may as well have taken me the whole damn year
There’s just too much to write down on a single page
I counted, and it took me a whole notebook to write

The truth is simple, I’m blind for thinking this can work
At the same time you’re the one who makes my spirit soar
This is a delusion, a world that’s colored in a dream
What’s the problem with me damn it? I’m so afraid

REPEAT CHORUS

So let’s go slow yeah we’re going slow, just let me see what I’m doing
I’m by myself, by myself again and the dream of you is gone
I’m just too much like a girl in love; a simple crush that lasts forever
I’ll let you know, yeah I’ll let you know, don’t hate me after all

I love you so…la-la-la yeah la-la-la yeah, in the end I’m standing tall
I still need you, yeah I still need you, but I can be strong on my own
So thank you for being the first, the first one I ever loved

The first one I ever loved

so basically you created your own translation and use the music as your background...well i gotta give you props for doing it....actually i've been thinking that before, what if i use iki's song and make my own version? hmm...

the whole song itself is pretty good, i felt the sincerity and i thought the shouting part fits the instrumental section of the song.

but if i try to be a little rough and "simon cowellish" to you...there are some notes that are pitchy and off the beat but most of the song you hit the right notes...(obviously were not professionals..hehe) but overall it was a good performance. Keep it up!

hey thank goodness i did not use "utterly atrocious" as what Simon always used to say...hahaha!

i think it will be a blazin hot performance for whatever purpose you intend on doin' to this song...school's talent show right? good luck!

Mabuhay ka!

Good Job! Koda:/gud:

thanks! I appreciate the review, masterjz

EDIT: actually, it's not a translation. Koisuru Otome is meant to be more heartwarming. These are my own lyrics.

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I got interested and especially blown away by the lyrics, but the file had been deleted from the server, so I e-mailed Koda asking him to send me the song. I believe he wouldn't mind if I re-up it again since somebody might want to have a listen, too. ^^
http://www.mediafire.com/?tmlomytbwjy

Thanks bananafish for the files...
About the koda version lyrics....it`s beautiful indeed!...^^

@bananafish - wow goin' extra mile just to get the file...good job. I haven't talk to Koda for quite some time now, he's been on hiatus for i don't when. Anyway let me hear the song again.

yeah (: those english lyrics even inspired me for the first time to sing Iki's song. I'm not quite ok with the chords yet, but anyway. ))

wow great job! actually you sing good.. in a usual rock band boy kind of way.
the lyrics were okay.lols. it was funny yet sweet at the same time.
thank goodness i heard this today.. just got inspired to try this in harmonica

@sakuno - you both live in canada and both fil-am...try practicing it together. hehe

lols. he's too far away. he's on the other side of the country haha. and yeah i'm not fil-am dude. haha

^^Be in the same country isnt enough to be closer
@kuroi tenshi and me are from mexico, but travel to his town takes me 7 hours